Glossary entry (derived from question below)
Italiano term or phrase:
ora dammi luce Tu
Inglese translation:
bestow thy light on me
Added to glossary by
Oana Popovici
Mar 13, 2009 10:20
15 yrs ago
Italiano term
Also an English teacher
Native in: Inglese 
Works in: Da Italiano a Inglese, Da Francese a Inglese, Da Inglese a Spagnolo
ora dammi luce Tu
Da Italiano a Inglese
Arte/Letteratura
Religione
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Thanks again everyone, I think it-s sounds better with all your suggestion. This sentence sounds the same as the Italian, what with the rhyme, but there-s always room for improvement!
my glorious blessed Lady
now give me light, you
for the road of virtue
that of sanctity
that for sanctity
Oh Splendidissima Signora
ora dammi luce Tu
per il cammino di virtù
quello della santità
quello per la santità.
my glorious blessed Lady
now give me light, you
for the road of virtue
that of sanctity
that for sanctity
Oh Splendidissima Signora
ora dammi luce Tu
per il cammino di virtù
quello della santità
quello per la santità.
Proposed translations
(Inglese)
| 3 +3 | bestow thy light on me |
Oana Popovici
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| 4 +1 | now show me Thy light |
Tom in London
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| 4 | give me your light, now |
David Russi
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| 4 | now give me light too |
Michael Shano
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Change log
Apr 25, 2009 22:52: Oana Popovici Created KOG entry
Proposed translations
+3
10 min
Oana Popovici
Italia
Italia
Italia
The right words at the right time.
Native in: Rumeno (Variants: Romania, Moldovan) 
Works in: Da Inglese a Rumeno, Da Italiano a Rumeno, Da Rumeno a Italiano, and 5 more.
Related KudoZ points
:
4
Selected
bestow thy light on me
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Note added at 11 mins (2009-03-13 10:32:23 GMT)
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now bestow Thy light on me
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Note added at 11 mins (2009-03-13 10:32:23 GMT)
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now bestow Thy light on me
4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Selected automatically based on peer agreement."
+1
3 min
Tom in London
Regno Unito
Regno Unito
Native in Inglese
Regno Unito
Architecture, design, technical, etc.
Native in: Inglese (Variant: British)
Works in: Da Italiano a Inglese
Related KudoZ points
:
28
now show me Thy light
and I wouldn't say "road". I'd say "way" or "path".
Road sounds like a ****ing motorway :)
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Note added at 4 mins (2009-03-13 10:25:37 GMT)
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and I wouldn't say "Lady" either. But hey, I'm not the translator.
Road sounds like a ****ing motorway :)
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Note added at 4 mins (2009-03-13 10:25:37 GMT)
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and I wouldn't say "Lady" either. But hey, I'm not the translator.
Peer comment(s):
| agree |
wordgirl
: also agree with "path" (no freeways to sanctity, unfortunately! And even if there were, with my luck, I would probably take a wrong exit anyway and get lost in the back alleys of Purgatory County!)
1 ora
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ha ha
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1 ora
David Russi
Stati Uniti
Stati Uniti
Native in Inglese
Stati Uniti
30+ years, stopped counting...
Native in: Inglese , Spagnolo
Works in: Da Inglese a Spagnolo, Da Spagnolo a Inglese
Related KudoZ points
:
4
give me your light, now
I like your version, and I agree it is closer to the cadence of the original, though I think in English the emphasis sounds better on now. Just preference.
Another idea: in the repetition, instead of repeating that of, I would repeat the actual noun, I would insert commas, and I would translate "per" as to or maybe even toward.
for the road of virtue,
the road of sanctity,
the road toward sanctity
Another idea: in the repetition, instead of repeating that of, I would repeat the actual noun, I would insert commas, and I would translate "per" as to or maybe even toward.
for the road of virtue,
the road of sanctity,
the road toward sanctity
1 ora
Michael Shano
Paesi Bassi
Paesi Bassi
Native in Inglese
Specializes in field
Paesi Bassi
Academic papers and speeches
Native in: Inglese
Works in: Da Olandese a Inglese, Da Italiano a Inglese
now give me light too
Putting together several suggestions, cadence and rhyme can be improved by using 'too' instead of 'you'.
Example sentence:
now give me light too
along the path of virtue
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